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Tuesday, November 25, 2008 posted by Lady Penelope in Pish-Takes Politics

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Posted by rev. dimmer
11/25 05:27 PM
The style and tone reminds me of those college papers I write to get through creative writing class.

Try “the” in place of “those” and “wrote” in place of “write”.

I guess epic fail applies?



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